introduction

kiberiais a good placee to live if you want to earn a dollar a day. slums  is a good place only if you want to save money.slums are bad beacuse they dont have clean water to drink, there are alot of people in the slums, and there are not many good doctors in the slums many people in the slums die beacuse they cannoot find clean water .

final draft

kiberiais a good placee to live if you want to earn a dollar a day. slums  is a good place only if you want to save money.slums are bad beacuse they dont have clean water to drink, there are alot of people in the slums, and there are not many good doctors in the slums many people in the slums die beacuse they cannoot find clean water .


People in the slums do not have accses to clean water not all the slums have accses to safre drinking water. if  you dont have clean water to drink it is bad for you you may also die and it may mess up your body.
Without good doctors you can get sick and die


There are not any good doctors in the slums beacuse they dont have good education and without doctors the people in the slums might get disieases and it may spread and more people may die.There are way too many people living in the slums.


There are alot of people in the slums so they do not have space to live or to sleep some people canty even afford a house so big to fill out theyre whole famaly it is also really crowded so that means more dirty things will drop to the house .


Kiberia is a good place to live if you want to earn a dollar a day. slums are bad beacuse they dont have waterto drink , dont have well educated doctors and famalys dont fit in rooms Should you donate money to slums?

rough draft

• .Kiberia is a good place to live if you need to earn 1 dollar a day 
• . slums is a place that you go to save money 
• . slums are bad because they don't have water to drink, there are not many doctors and there is alot of people in the slums.
• .Many people in the slums died because they drinked dirty water
•  people in the slums do not have accesses to clean water. not all the slums have access to to safe drinking water.c.If you don't have clean water it is bad for youwithout good doctors you can get sick there are no good doctors in the slums many people die.
• without the doctors people will get diseases and it will spread 
• There are many people in the slums It is so crowded!. there are a lot  of people in the slums theres not much roomsThe overall is important
• .kiberia is a good place to live if you win 1 dollar a day 
• .slums are bad because they dont have water to drink, there are not many doctors and there is alot ofpeople in the slums.
• . what should we do to help them 

outline

• A.Kiberia is a good place to live if you need to earn 1 dollar a day 
• B. slums is a place that you go to save money 
• c. slums are bad because they don't have water to drink, there are not many doctors and there is alot of people in the slums.
• d.Many people in the slums died because they drinked dirty water

II. A. people in the slums do not have accesses to clean water.

• b. not all the slums have access to to safe drinking water.
• c.If you don't have clean water it is bad for you
• d. without good doctors you can get sick 

III A. there are no good doctors in the slums many people die.

• C.without the doctors people will get diseases and it will spread 
• D.Thesis to many people living in slums 

IV A. There are many people in the slums 

 B.It is so crowded!

c. there are a lot  of people in the slums theres not much rooms

D. The overall is important

V. conclusion 

A.kiberia is a good place to live if you win 1 dollar a day 

B.slums are bad because they dont have water to drink, there are not many doctors and there is alot of people in the slums.

D. what should we do to help them 

Thesis

Slums are bad beacuse they  dont have water to drink,there are no good doctors and theres to many people in the slums